@Lustchyld
i listened to those freestyles, b. they were alright, but they were just that....freestyles. your beat selection was cool because it wasnt the most recent beats out, but at the same time, they didnt leave much for the imagination because the tracks are so old. last time i heard the "round & round" beat was when god knows when....prolly watching how high.
what i can say is that theres work to be done! you sound is kind of dated and generic. its exactly what id expect to hear from someone on the internet who says that they rap. nothing is wrong with your rhymes, they just felt impersonal. you need to inject yourself into these songs so that the listener can distinguish you from other people and know exactly why they are listening to you. maybe if you had an original track in there, it would be easier to hear YOU.
but thats my critique. if you feel like returning the favor, my music is at
http://www.isntiteyeronic.com.