My Headphones

[Azekiel-Horizon]

The imagery that you portrayed in this piece is what gave me that serious vibe that you were speaking about. I believe lines like this :

Music is an endless present

Measured in kilobits per second

Three hundred and twenty bits of bliss

Fix that which resides from what I miss

is what appealed to me the most in this poem and because of such imagery it doesn't come off as cheesy. Nice piece, keep dropping poetic gems like this one

 

[stupot0607]

Nice Drop Draft, its got a nice theme & feel to it.

Was suprised to find you wrote this listening to Redman, being a serious piece haha, im suprised it isnt like "if you find a bag of weed on the floor motherfucker, what the fuck you gonna do, pick it up, pick it up"

 

[RuffDraft]

The imagery that you portrayed in this piece is what gave me that serious vibe that you were speaking about. I believe lines like this :

Music is an endless present
Measured in kilobits per second
Three hundred and twenty bits of bliss
Fix that which resides from what I miss

is what appealed to me the most in this poem and because of such imagery it doesn't come off as cheesy. Nice piece, keep dropping poetic gems like this one

Thanks... I did like the measured in kilobits per second line too... this is one of my lighter poems though, most are just plain depressing lol. Thanks for the feedback though, appreciate it... and glad that it hasn't come off as cheesy :tu

Nice Drop Draft, its got a nice theme & feel to it.

Was suprised to find you wrote this listening to Redman, being a serious piece haha, im suprised it isnt like "if you find a bag of weed on the floor motherfucker, what the fuck you gonna do, pick it up, pick it up"

hahahahaha it was like that initially and then I started to just listen to the beat and bounce around with rhymes, but I basically played Redman to remove my thoughts, which is really what the piece is about...

Ridding your thoughts and replacing them with music, it's like a coping mechanism, so my headphones bring me peace and control my thoughts. They take all that's around me and shut it off... that's why it's an escape but also an enclosure.

Props on the feedback :tu

 

[Tupacfan]

Dizzzam! I'm MAD jealous!

this shit was dope Ruff! hella dope!!!

the rhymes is def there.. so yea keep spitting that poetic shit fam..

thanks for sharing, cause ya'll is really inspiring and motivating me to write!

peace!

 

[RuffDraft]

Dizzzam! I'm MAD jealous!

this shit was dope Ruff! hella dope!!!

the rhymes is def there.. so yea keep spitting that poetic shit fam..

thanks for sharing, cause ya'll is really inspiring and motivating me to write!

peace!

Thanks tupacfan Means a lot coming from you, so I appreciate it... I wasn't so sure on the piece at first, but you've all given me faith lol.

 

[Tupacfan]

Thanks tupacfan Means a lot coming from you, so I appreciate it... I wasn't so sure on the piece at first, but you've all given me faith lol.

your welcome RD! If i can motivate you to write, my job is DONE, ha.. fa real though, i'm glad your keeping this place alive, among st a few others as well.. and if wasn't you sharing your creativity with us, I would have nothing to read or be inspired by.. so thanks to you!

now get to writing lol.. class resumes ha.

 

[RuffDraft]

your welcome RD! If i can motivate you to write, my job is DONE, ha.. fa real though, i'm glad your keeping this place alive, among st a few others as well.. and if wasn't you sharing your creativity with us, I would have nothing to read or be inspired by.. so thanks to you!

now get to writing lol.. class resumes ha.

haha I'm the teacher, I'll tell you when the class starts (LOL/I joke!)

Nah, you've held this place down for years, I only go through certain periods of writing rhymes... to you it's a whole part of you and your life.

Keep posting, we appreciate it.... and thanks for your feedback again, without feedback, the need to share seems pointless. I am being more creative recently, just a shame my job takes over my life. I'll be posting more poems in the summer I imagine.... keep posting tupacfan and keeping your ever present positive view on life... as always, refreshing.

 

[Yummy.Lix]

I love it.In some strange way I can relate to it, although my passion

isn't music. & Don't worry about it being "too rhyme-y." I don't think it was.&

Even if it was,if you know the rules of poetry, I think it's okay to break them

sometimes.

 

[RuffDraft]

I love it.In some strange way I can relate to it, although my passion
isn't music. & Don't worry about it being "too rhyme-y." I don't think it was.&
Even if it was,if you know the rules of poetry, I think it's okay to break them
sometimes.

Thanks Yummy

Appreciate you reading my poem, get back to writing stories, I for one, miss them!