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This poem was really nice.I got confused in the lower

middle though.Was the poem over all about a woman

starting to do bad because she lost faith in finding love?
 
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Yummy.Lix;2094059 said:
This poem was really nice.I got confused in the lower
middle though.Was the poem over all about a woman
starting to do bad because she lost faith in finding love?

lol I know it's a bit complicated, basically the woman is a shooting star i.e. beautiful, full of wisdom and grace but has lost her place amongst the stars because she has forgotten how to love. So stars around her are frustrated at her wasting a perfectly good opportunity at love that is special and rare because of her past (and a boyfriend of seven years cheating on her). Basically, following heart ache and lost faith, she is no longer willing to take a leap of faith herself and will settle for safe love rather than trying to escape how she is feeling and finding it for real. She would rather settle for second place as a way of protecting herself even though she already lies crooked and unfulfilled. Unable to love and overly busy with her schedule to avoid real feelings.

Faithful is the man that she should be with, he is always there, chasing her beyond despair, but she is so fast and working at such a pace that he cannot keep up. She is keeping busy so she doesn't have to face reality and break free of the heartache that she felt two years prior when her boyfriend of seven years cheated. For the two years since, Faithful and her have shared everything that a woman could ever wish for, but she won't take the leap of faith with him because it's a complicated situation i.e. him being a thousand miles away.

The ending explains that love is lost because he can no longer find her in herself. She has evaded her feelings for so long and stopped being who she was that made Faithful chase her in the first place that even when he calls her on her number, he can no longer find her in herself when she speaks to him. She is lost for good and therefore faded into dust in the air with all their hopes of love gone forever.

Thanks for reading!! Appreciate it :tu
 
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RuffDraft;2094111 said:
lol I know it's a bit complicated, basically the woman is a shooting star i.e. beautiful, full of wisdom and grace but has lost her place amongst the stars because she has forgotten how to love. So stars around her are frustrated at her wasting a perfectly good opportunity at love that is special and rare because of her past (and a boyfriend of seven years cheating on her). Basically, following heart ache and lost faith, she is no longer willing to take a leap of faith herself and will settle for safe love rather than trying to escape how she is feeling and finding it for real. She would rather settle for second place as a way of protecting herself even though she already lies crooked and unfulfilled. Unable to love and overly busy with her schedule to avoid real feelings.

Faithful is the man that she should be with, he is always there, chasing her beyond despair, but she is so fast and working at such a pace that he cannot keep up. She is keeping busy so she doesn't have to face reality and break free of the heartache that she felt two years prior when her boyfriend of seven years cheated. For the two years since, Faithful and her have shared everything that a woman could ever wish for, but she won't take the leap of faith with him because it's a complicated situation i.e. him being a thousand miles away.

The ending explains that love is lost because he can no longer find her in herself. She has evaded her feelings for so long and stopped being who she was that made Faithful chase her in the first place that even when he calls her on her number, he can no longer find her in herself when she speaks to him. She is lost for good and therefore faded into dust in the air with all their hopes of love gone forever.

Thanks for reading!! Appreciate it :tu

This seems like it took a lot of thought. (:

Was this made up or did you base this off

of a situation you were once in?
 
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Yummy.Lix;2094168 said:
This seems like it took a lot of thought. (:
Was this made up or did you base this off
of a situation you were once in?

It's definitely based on some truths, but I think it's relevant for a lot of women who have been cheated on... most of them pass up opportunities in the future because they're unsure to take a journey that left them heartbroken the last time. So they decide to go with something that they know and understand, that will let them down but only because they are already imperfect. They won't go for the one who they think is perfect in many ways because of the obstacles that stand in the way; such as distance or providing that person with the opportunity to shatter them into pieces once again. I think once in a lifetime is enough for them.

After explaining it, does it make more sense now? I want people to understand it after two reads... isn't a good poem to me if you have to read it over and over and are still lost lol
 
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*snaps* wow...i'm speechless from reading such vivid and deep lines of this piece...this poem takes me back to a golden age of poetry...bottom line excellent work

keep dropping those pure lines of thought provoking lingo called poetry my fellow poet

peace
 
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REAL_POETICAL;2151210 said:
*snaps* wow...i'm speechless from reading such vivid and deep lines of this piece...this poem takes me back to a golden age of poetry...bottom line excellent work

keep dropping those pure lines of thought provoking lingo called poetry my fellow poet

peace

Thanks, I don't think it's my best piece, I wish I could have made it shorter... but I spent so much time on it already, I decided to just put it out there...

Thanks for reading and the kind comments....
 
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