Obsession

[Purr]

Wow. What a dope concept! I love reading words that bring visuals to mind. mmm, the rhythm is a bit off in and out..

example: I loved you from the 1st moment I saw you.
Every day searching for your number so I can call you.
Always blowing you kiss when I see you on TV.
But in my heart you know u should be here with me.

I loved you from the 1st moment I saw you.
Every day searching for your number so I can call you.
Always blowing you kisses when I see you on TV.
But in my heart you know u should be here with me.

by adding kisses it completes the rhythm better sounding in my head or when I speak it out loud.

 

[Zone6reppa]

BRRRR! lol, shouts out to the kidd on dis one.......

 

[Rocket Kidd]

Wow. What a dope concept! I love reading words that bring visuals to mind. mmm, the rhythm is a bit off in and out..

example: I loved you from the 1st moment I saw you.

Every day searching for your number so I can call you.

Always blowing you kiss when I see you on TV.

But in my heart you know u should be here with me.

I loved you from the 1st moment I saw you.

Every day searching for your number so I can call you.

Always blowing you kisses when I see you on TV.

But in my heart you know u should be here with me.

by adding kisses it completes the rhythm better sounding in my head or when I speak it out loud.

thanks for the feedback..i'll make sure to remember that next time.

 

[Tupacfan]

Dam Kidd,

This jawn right here is very well written and gives me an image, a clear one at that..

the word play was on point with the rhyme scheme and I enjoyed reading this so keep em' comin

Btw, you should go drop a few words in the thread I created, "Why do you write" and contribute to as why do you write..

And thanks for sharing and I hope to read more!

 

[cody beach]

Be quiet,it is important