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Pretty good opener. U lost a lil heat towards the middle. You have some good vocab but you didn't switch it up at all. Some metaphors and a few punches would of made this more solid.. I'm really diggin the concept though.. Great work..
 
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Thanks for the feedback man. It did lack some punches but I was more focused on the content this time around.
 
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