Rhode Island Rapper destroying Tupac's Heartz Of Men Beat

[MaliciousJynx25]

I would never Pac's beat because a majority of them are simple and if you do not have a persence with ur voice, you won't make it. Overall it was decent. You def have a catch for words and the structure of them in terms of delivery. You need to find what fits you, random rapping is good when your talented but not when your just average with a few positives and negatives. You have potential, keep going strong and away have a ideal of yourself and where you want to go.

Thanx for the feedback man, i appreciate it.......this is the feedback's i been wanting....i want to improve

 

[Ekscape]

I go by the name Of Malicious Jynx, im an up and coming rapper from rhode island, here is a new song I wrote and recorded called "Game Time".....Drop your feedback [video=youtube;BgqK-eDycy4]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BgqK-eDycy4[/video]

alright man here's my feedback if you care...

1. You started you're freestyle 8 bars to late... You're a new rapper that no one has heard of, no body wants to hear a four bar intro and eight bars of adlibbing... If I was an exec and you ran up on me and played to for me trying to get a deal I woulda shut that shit off after hearing, "here we go" about the second time...

2. You need to come harder if you're gonna spit a freestyle... You need to catch my attention with your lyrics within the first four bars or i'm shutting this shit off and continuing on with my day

3. Try not doubling your voice on your verses... see how that sounds

4. Come real, if you're not a big shot spending dough every day... blah blah blah... don't say that sh*t... This era of rap is heading to people being "real" about them selves... that what people wanna hear now... seriously

 

[jonlakadeadmic]

Im from Pawtucket homie

i graduated from saint rays 3 years ago, lol@ people thinkin there isnt black people in RI, especially in the pawtucket/central falls area

 

[b@squ1@t redux]

you got a long way to go

 

[blackdemo]

idk bro, the vocals aint really on point, shit gotta sound official

 

[blackdemo]

alright man here's my feedback if you care...

1. You started you're freestyle 8 bars to late... You're a new rapper that no one has heard of, no body wants to hear a four bar intro and eight bars of adlibbing... If I was an exec and you ran up on me and played to for me trying to get a deal I woulda shut that shit off after hearing, "here we go" about the second time...

2. You need to come harder if you're gonna spit a freestyle... You need to catch my attention with your lyrics within the first four bars or i'm shutting this shit off and continuing on with my day

3. Try not doubling your voice on your verses... see how that sounds

4. Come real, if you're not a big shot spending dough every day... blah blah blah... don't say that sh*t... This era of rap is heading to people being "real" about them selves... that what people wanna hear now... seriously

couldnt of said it any better, use this niggas advice as motivation for u man, it takes time

 

[MaliciousJynx25]

alright man here's my feedback if you care...

1. You started you're freestyle 8 bars to late... You're a new rapper that no one has heard of, no body wants to hear a four bar intro and eight bars of adlibbing... If I was an exec and you ran up on me and played to for me trying to get a deal I woulda shut that shit off after hearing, "here we go" about the second time...

2. You need to come harder if you're gonna spit a freestyle... You need to catch my attention with your lyrics within the first four bars or i'm shutting this shit off and continuing on with my day

3. Try not doubling your voice on your verses... see how that sounds

4. Come real, if you're not a big shot spending dough every day... blah blah blah... don't say that sh*t... This era of rap is heading to people being "real" about them selves... that what people wanna hear now... seriously

this is why i put myself out there and post my music up because i need feedback like this for me to improve on anything. thanx alot homie

 

[MaliciousJynx25]

idk bro, the vocals aint really on point, shit gotta sound official

im gonna take the doubles off and see how it is

becUA

 

[MaliciousJynx25]

i graduated from saint rays 3 years ago, lol@ people thinkin there isnt black people in RI, especially in the pawtucket/central falls area

lol i know, i went to shea so we are pretty close, people dont think their are minorities in ri because half of them dont even know the state exists.....everytime i go to new york and i tell them where im from, they look at me like wtf? lol

 

[MaliciousJynx25]

i took my doubles off and now it sounds better[video=youtube;9S_3FHfL_SQ]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9S_3FHfL_SQ[/video]

 

[Averian24]

i took my doubles off and now it sounds better[video=youtube;9S_3FHfL_SQ]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9S_3FHfL_SQ[/video]

sounds way better homie, good job

 

[MaliciousJynx25]

sounds way better homie, good job

thanx man, i appreciate u always showing me love when i drop tracks

 

[Ekscape]

i took my doubles off and now it sounds better[video=youtube;9S_3FHfL_SQ]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9S_3FHfL_SQ[/video]

There nothing wrong with doubles if you do it right... Try the double with one of the tracks significantly lower then the other and use a vocalign plug in on it.

 

[Ishi]

Nice effort keep doing ya thing for all 6 or 7 black people in RI keep representing Lol jking I'm sure there is more of ya...........

 

[MaliciousJynx25]

Nice effort keep doing ya thing for all 6 or 7 black people in RI keep representing Lol jking I'm sure there is more of ya...........

lol there are alot of black people and minorites in rhode island...thanx for listening to the song

 

[bankrupt baller]

[video=youtube;8k2GywV1QC8]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8k2GywV1QC8[/video]

listen again and then tell me you destroyed this beat lol

 

[_illstrip]

sometimes u can only do u ... tupac was tupac for a reason ... for a CONSUMER its hard to accept a track your already familar with and gets redone not so much better than the original ....

but as an artist u just gotta do you a la ... wakavelli ... u seen the heat he caught for that and that album is no where near touching pac ... but u just gotta do u ... and be ok with that and not let the negative feedback get to u ...

 

[KingJB2ThaFullest86]

nigga your shit was......

 

[MaliciousJynx25]

nigga your shit was......

no problem, thanx anyways

 

[MaliciousJynx25]

sometimes u can only do u ... tupac was tupac for a reason ... for a CONSUMER its hard to accept a track your already familar with and gets redone not so much better than the original ....

but as an artist u just gotta do you a la ... wakavelli ... u seen the heat he caught for that and that album is no where near touching pac ... but u just gotta do u ... and be ok with that and not let the negative feedback get to u ...

some good advice right here