Raw-Material versus love yal

[Tupacfan]

Okay, I thought this battle was interesting..

I felt like love yal had a subliminal diss for me too.. Where he mentioned poetry. Cause I know I'm the only folk in here that writes, read, and perfom spoken word.. Its all good though, I just wanted to point that out before I cast my vote..

I honestly didn't understand or grasped love yal's verse.. I feel you need more structure in terms of conveying the diss, stick to one metaphor and ride that out.. You's all over the place.. I'm sorry but I'm being honest and likely blaunt with it.. You do have the potential to improve though, you really do.. U have the vocabs, you just need to play with it and make sense of it.. also, you need to go extra harder, cause your verse is lightweight... Take this as constructive feedback.. And much props for stepping in the battle zone with raw..

With that said my vote is for Raw AHH Material..

Why?

Because his verse was far wayyy more understandable, and he had punches, I didn't really see any multi's but his jawn still hit hard.. I wish could quote some verse but uhhh I'm on my smart phone..

 

[love yal]

Thanks for reading and voting, a harder punchline is. I'm cool like frozen ice my bars will freeze you ice cube freezer...how's that, I'm trying to forget about rhyming and just go with the flow like you said like you said stick with one metaphor..

Okay, I thought this battle was interesting..

I felt like love yal had a subliminal diss for me too.. Where he mentioned poetry. Cause I know I'm the only folk in here that writes, read, and perfom spoken word.. Its all good though, I just wanted to point that out before I cast my vote..

I honestly didn't understand or grasped love yal's verse.. I feel you need more structure in terms of conveying the diss, stick to one metaphor and ride that out.. You's all over the place.. I'm sorry but I'm being honest and likely blaunt with it.. You do have the potential to improve though, you really do.. U have the vocabs, you just need to play with it and make sense of it.. also, you need to go extra harder, cause your verse is lightweight... Take this as constructive feedback.. And much props for stepping in the battle zone with raw..

With that said my vote is for Raw AHH Material..

Why?

Because his verse was far wayyy more understandable, and he had punches, I didn't really see any multi's but his jawn still hit hard.. I wish could quote some verse but uhhh I'm on my smart phone..

 

[love yal]

Thanks for voting, Raw did good...you notice I don't curse, not trying to be wack..I'm trying to rap politely so I can sound nice and clean. But so when diss him should I talk about myself like I'm the best, you can't get nice, I'm just better than you...like that...I'm tried to diss him, I guess throw him some jokes, what type of lines will grab people attention?

raw u went soft on him

coulda played off his name more

none the less u did take this easily

you're multis' punches structure metas similes

basically every category, u outshined his ass

love yall u needa work on better structure, longer multis, and better insults.

u didnt really insult him that bad

vote to raw

 

[love yal]

I'm not trying to pick on you again, what do you mean he or she?

actually love yal may win he or she has a few hot lines im interested how this may turn out

 

[thedesolateone]

I'm not trying to pick on you again, what do you mean he or she?

just not sure of your gender are you a he or she or other.i assume you are gay christian male but this is the internet so i could be wrong

 

[love yal]

Lol you are not a fag or a fruit cake, sounds like you trying to get me suspended...do you want to battle? You can talk some stuff..

just not sure of your gender are you a he or she or other.i assume you are gay christian male but this is the internet so i could be wrong

 

[thedesolateone]

Lol you trying to get me suspended...do you want battle? You can talk some stuff..

sure we can battle.was i right ?im guessing you are latino also

 

[love yal]

What's your due date?

sure we can battle.was i right ?im guessing you are latino also

 

[thedesolateone]

What's your due date?

well was i correct about you?

the due date is 3 hours from now

 

[love yal]

Due date due Friday midnight I'll set up..

well was i correct about you?

the due date is 3 hours from now

 

[thedesolateone]

Due date due Friday midnight I'll set up..

ok friday but why wont you tell me if i am right about you?

 

[raw-material_ahh]

Thanks for voting, Raw did good...you notice I don't curse, not trying to be wack..I'm trying to rap politely so I can sound nice and clean. But so when diss him should I talk about myself like I'm the best, you can't get nice, I'm just better than you...like that...I'm tried to diss him, I guess throw him some jokes, what type of lines will grab people attention?

I can respect that. You'll get there. If you go through 10 battles and win only 1, you will be a lot better than if you've never battled.

 

[love yal]

When ever you bored, rematches are always open.....but thanks for the battle...good luck on who battles you next..

 

[love yal]

Please vote...we need finish this thread....who won this battle?....please vote, what's your favorite lines?, explain your reason why you vote, thanksyou.

 

[thedesolateone]

my vote is for love yal cause he called raws verse bird drop which made me laugh and also said raw was softer than two marshmellowmen and that he couldnt come with better lines if his name was poetry
the rest of love yals verse looked like it had some potential like the cognitive imagery part but was nonsensical .

raws verse was full of so-called punchlines that i just didnt get and the only hot lines i thought was lines 2 and 15
everything else seems very long winded and for no reason and i thought love yal came harder with the methaphors
love yals verse i would give a 3 raw materials i would give a 2 1/2

im just being honest not tryin to hate on anyone

decision:love yal

 

[raw-material_ahh]

Please vote...we need finish this thread....who won this battle?....please vote, what's your favorite lines?, explain your reason why you vote, thanksyou.

I think we should have put a date when voting ends so both of us could move on. That's why I haven't battled anyone in a couple of days. So tomorrow midnight because that would make it a week I think.

 

[esco soprano]

Ok I read through Love yal's verse twice and still couldn't really pick up on what he's trying to say. I understand after reading the complete thread he's learning as he goes. But that said, Raw took this battle with little effort. From his opener (which humor is always a strong way to jump it off) I appreciated it and actually LOL, and even though I don't really know love yal I could tell Raw's verse had personals and he kept alluding to beating off lol. There was no contest with how the verse was crafted technically, punches or really any challenge.

I liked this line "I've seen so many misses, strike one against her but two with me cuz I'm in the ZONE/" not the illest but I liked the wordplay.

Love yal I liked this line "This is not Cavaliers vs Nets, still win what rhymes with jets, still schooling you" I got the idea you were saying your a vet schooling him which was dope to me but I didn't really follow any of your verse. It was kind of cookie cutter with words meshed together.

In summation, I think Love yal has some work to do I agree you have to sharpen your english but keep your vocabulary because it was pretty good.

VOTE: Raw Material

 

[Tupacfan]

I had casted my vote for this..

I vote raw, because he came hard with the punch lines, metaphors, and I feel he was light weight with his diss. Even though he did, he still won because of everything he incorporate, metaphors, word play, and ofciurse the multi's..

Love ya, needed structure in this battle, but his vocabs is nice though.. Just gotta put it in the order that it makes logical sense.

 

[deaththreats]

Does this battle still need votes?...

 

[love yal]

Thanks for voting, but keep voting.