My first rap song

[ZuluZombie]

can i atleast get a "you suck kid!" ???

 

[TheRicanKing]

you fucking suck niggga goddamn!

lol sike nah, you need more energy you sound dead otherwise decent.

 

[dalyricalbandit]

...sucksss and the nerve of the shout outs at the end

 

[5th Letter]

your flow needs a lot of work. lyrically you are decent.

 

[_Menace_]

yall fucked up.

anyways bro u got potential. just work on

flow

delivery

and you need more energy

 

[InLightinShit]

You have talent but seriously you talkin some shit on those bars. Maybe I didn't get the message you were trying to put across. Show the world who you are and what you got. You're flow and delivery will improve with practice of your lyrics but who cares if your flow is ill if your lyrics are shit? Answer; Modern day Eminem fans

Raekwon "Yo anybody can rhyme... but it's what you saying that makes a person know about you... know the type of person you is."

Happiness is just a state of mind so make yourself happy. Keep spittin and big love to the hip hop nation.

 

[BuddyB]

can i atleast get a "you suck kid!" ???

Yo man,

real talk.. Your lyrics are nice.. Sometimes you try to say too much and it sounds like you cram it in. This just means you need to work on your speed a little bit. You need to work on your delivery as well. Look into breathing technics and what not.. For real, you gpt skills but if you were killin the delivery and not missn a beat and had some compression on it (sounds like youa re using a dynamic mic dude, a condenser is not that0 much) then the song would be the shit..

All in all you got skills so mad props. Just keep at it.

Bytepushers records

http://www.myspace.com/bytepushersmusic

http://www.bytepushers.com

http://blog.bytepushers.com

 

[Azmik]

yeah, just keep doin what you do. it's listenable right now, and you can tell you got skills.