tupacfan;3842620 said:This was an interesting read Draft, as always thanks for sharing.
With this piece i wish you went further, the reading was intense, and you done great delivering the verbs tooagain thanks.
Peace..
It was a 30 minute piece, so I just went with what I had... was just a cool concept that I wanted to stick with...
Did you get who was writing it in the first perspective???
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stupot0607
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as Tupacfan said! INTENSE! Kinda scary actually...
Good piece though, set the scene.... You not wantin to extend it?
Good piece though, set the scene.... You not wantin to extend it?
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stupot0607;3851811 said:
haha I wanted it to be intense and scary though, like a movie…
I don't know if either of you have gathered who I am in this piece as the writer - the writer is a sniper, watching the predator attacking his victim. He's unable to shoot as you're not allowed to shoot the would-be rapist/murderer until you're given your orders to do so…
I was intrigued by what would be going through the sniper's mind when something like this occurs before them. To me, I would want to shoot straight away as I like to think that I really respect women and therefore would want to do something as quickly as possible in this particular circumstance...
That said, when you're unable to do so and those scenes are unraveling before you, you must really want the predator to make his move… the fact that he finally does, when he reaches for his hatchet, allows the sniper to finally use this as his evidence/reason to shoot the predator… and he's really pleased to send the predator to his death (hence 'but my bait has arrived, and shall now meet with death.'
Did that come across in the piece? And if not, after reading it again, does it make more sense? This is kind of why I don't want to build upon it, I don't want to give away too many clues, but there are three in total as to who the person is who is giving the descriptions…
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Astronaughts
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and shall now meet with death! love it!
