LE Tournament #2 ROUND TWO - sniperk -VS- ItzGravitation

[raw-material_ahh]

Things look straight right now. Didn't get a chance to read ItzGravitation's verse prior to the edit. My criticism and vote:

sniperk

Last battle I got a bye, now I'm battling bi-sexuals?

Boom bye bye on this batty boy, I turn fruits into vegetables

Good opener. More funny than hard but not bad.

Shit, I'll get extra-terrestrial, his whole style lacks GRAVITATIONAL..pull

"Escape velocity" from your "black hole", how's that for educational?

I'm not sure if this is a gay reference or not but the meta is sick but not a hard punch. Just a lot of flash.

Fig Newton, I'm straight rapin' you, I got this tiger by the tail

This same STANLEY always CUPping the nuts of a certain half-Jew from Rosedale

This was okay. Don't understand the Rosedale reference. The Stan line was cool.

But I have you shook like Jimmy Brooks, your retarded style is SIMPlistic

That wheelchair flow couldn't even sell wolf tickets at the Special Olympics

Only reason I got this is BC when Drake blew up, it came out he was the wheelchair kid in Degrassi. LOL. Best lines so far.

Tiger blood? Tigga what? This fake Charlie Sheen should have DQ'ed

Ginger snaps? Paula Abdul? Now this Dairy Queen is getting B-B-Q'ed

Pretty average. Not lame though.

"Straight Up" you getting "Knocked Out"... fuck your checkers, this is checkmate

I'm Bobby Fischer Against the World, you just a cancelled Czech, mate

This would've been harder if Bobby Fischer had anything to do with Czech's. But he battled in America and Iceland. Still like it though.

Or should I say a cancelled cheque, mate? NSF... insufficient flow

Down for the count, cancel you account, mate and don't post here no mo'

Pretty basic stuff.

Cuz Sniper K's a "Survivor", no "Redemption" for Tony the Tiger

I (eye) dug his GRRRRRRRRRRRRR-ave (grave), and bust "man GRAVY" on his cadaver

SICK outro. Probably your best lines too of the battle.

ItzGravitation

This dude say he’s a sniper well then he should try again.

My avi is a tiger but I’m kin to a leviathan

Pretty basic. I like the leviathan idea but there was no punch mixed in with it. 2nd line was kind of a boast. Weak opener.

Like I said before, track four, I’m the fireman.

Call me Tony Stark, when I hit you with that ironman.

Track four? Really like the 2nd line though. SICK.

You say its no feeding so Its Bleach i'm Soul Reaping

Better yet soul raping leave your souls pussy gaping

This was okay. Would've like to see a punch mixed in with it though

I’m flyer than and higher than a kite, get it right.

Cant nobody pull my strings, cuz the bird is the word in flight.

1st line is so played. Lol. Probably with these lines are that you aren't battling sniperk really. Boast.

Its me versus you at midnight I got a knife.

I’m so cold I just throw and it lands where you snipe.

Real simple. Doesn't seem like much thought were put into these lines. What's up?? "me vs. you at midnight, i got a knife."?? The wording on the 2nd line seems basic too. I feel like I'm missing something here or you are missing something.

That’s just a preemptive strike, nothing left to say right.

Except that I’m bad for your sight don’t aim at light.

Kind of a boast but didn't really punch hard. It's my understanding that you are trying to say he can't see you but there isn't much more to it.

I call you Sniper, why? Cuz you profile say so.

But you couldn’t snipe a soul if you where playing halo.

Starting to fall off. This was eh.

Like call of duty got two uzis hit you with that two piece.

How the fuck you get beet by a fruit you lil groupie

I don't get the 2nd line. You trying to say you're a fruit? Lol. Not cool. You get points for using a meta in this line though.

Basically, sniperk's verse had some mistakes but also some real sick lines. Decent intro. 3-4 real good lines. All lines were directed at his opponent and battle oriented. Some metas put in there. Punches. Looked like some real work was put into his verse. And ItzGravitation had 1, maybe 2 sick lines but his mistakes were major. Some real simple lines like "Except that I’m bad for your sight don’t aim at light.", "I’m flyer than and higher than a kite, get it right." and "I’m so cold I just throw and it lands where you snipe." to name a few. Would've liked to see more metas or punches put into the verse. My vote is for sniperk. GL to each of you.

 

[ItzGravitation]

i think i might lose since i changed my verse.
No trippin tho

 

[ItzGravitation]

sniperk is breaking rules

if dude broke rules i demand i get to redo a verse cuz ppl say i was feeding and i had to rush my shit.

 

[ItzGravitation]

if dude broke a rule i wwant to redo my verse since i had to rush mine.
Dont know what feeding is but i;m sure i didnt do it

 

[thedesolateone]

Last battle I got a bye, now I'm battling bi-sexuals? -lots of alliteration

Boom bye bye on this batty boy, I turn fruits into vegetables -more alliteration with a nice original punchline

Shit, I'll get extra-terrestrial, his whole style lacks GRAVITATIONAL..pull -not really exta-terrestrial

"Escape velocity" from your "black hole", how's that for educational?- sounds forced not well developed

Fig Newton, I'm straight rapin' you, I got this tiger by the tail-makes me laugh

This same STANLEY always CUPping the nuts of a certain half-Jew from Rosedale-real lyrical but too complex

But I have you shook like Jimmy Brooks, your retarded style is SIMPlistic-i dont get why he capitalized simp but then i never watched drakes show

That wheelchair flow couldn't even sell wolf tickets at the Special Olympics-this is lyrical and dope

Tiger blood? Tigga what? This fake Charlie Sheen should have DQ'ed-play on his avi made me laugh

Ginger snaps? Paula Abdul? Now this Dairy Queen is getting B-B-Q'ed-hilarious with the dairy queen reference

"Straight Up" you getting "Knocked Out"... fuck your checkers, this is checkmate-i dont understand the quotation marks

I'm Bobby Fischer Against the World, you just a cancelled Czech, mate- i like the wordplay of checkmate and the methaphor of chess

Or should I say a cancelled cheque, mate? NSF... insufficient flow -i like the continued checkmate wordplay and it fits as a good diss

Down for the count, cancel you account, mate and don't post here no mo'-sound like a set up for his strongest line

Cuz Sniper K's a "Survivor", no "Redemption" for Tony the Tiger

I (eye) dug his GRRRRRRRRRRRRR-ave (grave), and bust "man GRAVY" on his cadaver-i dont get the eye homonyms but the funny and twisted ending i like

i would give this verse a 6

 

[thedesolateone]

This dude say he’s a sniper well then he should try again.
My avi is a tiger but I’m kin to a leviathan- i like the methaphors of tiger then leviathan
Like I said before, track four, I’m the fireman.- dont get what you mean by track 4 but i like the rhyme
Call me Tony Stark, when I hit you with that ironman.-this is dope and creative plus nice rhyme and flow
You say its no feeding so Its Bleach i'm Soul Reaping -i dont get it
Better yet soul raping leave your souls pussy gaping-funny :never thought of a soul havin a pussy
I’m flyer than and higher than a kite, get it right.-just wack and unoriginal
Cant nobody pull my strings, cuz the bird is the word in flight. -wack
Its me versus you at midnight I got a knife.-wack
I’m so cold I just throw and it lands where you snipe.-nice punchline and visual
That’s just a preemptive strike, nothing left to say right.-i like this line
Except that I’m bad for your sight don’t aim at light.nice shadow-boxed reverse and visual
I call you Sniper, why? Cuz you profile say so.-wack and obvious
But you couldn’t snipe a soul if you where playing halo.-ok line
Like call of duty got two uzis hit you with that two piece. -i like the multis and sounds cool
How the fuck you get beet by a fruit you lil groupie

-punchline doesnt work ;beet by a fruit?-lil groupie isnt a hard enough dis

i give this verse a 5.5 my vote is for sniperk

 

[C.Melendez]

skipping this battle since my vote may looked on as bias

 

[love yal]

Sniperk vs. ItGravitation was a good battle also was a funny match!

Favorite lines from Sniperk: That wheelchair flow couldn't even sell wolf tickets at Special Olympics/ tiger blood? Tigga what? This fake Charlie Sheen should have Dq'ed.

Favorite lines from ItGravitation: I call you Sniper, why? Cuz your profile say so/ but couldn't snipe a soul if your playing Halo

Punches: tie

Creativity: Sniperk

Flow: tie

Metaphor: tie

Structure : tie

Multies : ItGravitation

Personals: tie

Both verses were very strong and joy to read....my vote: tie

 

[Tupacfan]

This was a good battle. Both battler's had some great lines, and I feel that Sniperk came with more punches than itgravitation.. Sniperk's verse had structure, creativity, punches, and the flow was easy to grasp.. Itgravitiation had those qualities too, but it lacked creativity because I felt his rebuttal was feeding..

My vote: Sniperk for the reason's i had mentioned above.

 

[raw-material_ahh]

if dude broke a rule i wwant to redo my verse since i had to rush mine.
Dont know what feeding is but i;m sure i didnt do it

What rule did he break? To take criticism like a man? Lol. I put that in there so people don't clog up the battle threads with nonsense so when people try and vote, they don't have to shuffle through so many posts. In theory, battle threads are supposed to go like this. My post > two check ins > two verses > votes. But somewhere down the down, almost every battle, people catch feelings because EVERYONE thinks their verse is perfect. This battle is a good example. You can even check your last battle with C.Melendez. I tried to tell people if they have a problem with BS, take it to the Shit Talking Thread and when I come in here to vote or close things up, I read every post and decide how I should moderate things. Anyway, sniperk wins 3-1. 4-1 if you want to count tupacfan's late vote. Sucks that you had to edit your verse and rush it BC you were feeding but that's how it goes sometimes. Come back hard in the summer tournament.