BlackRoses
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I teared up b/c u showed the greatest feeling of courage writing this....i only give u the utmost respect b/c of this poem
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ThaChozenWun
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Powerful, real powerful. To some it make give them a feelin of sadness, it gives me a sense of your strength and the will to keep pushing. Props on this piece, it takes a strong person to write something like it.
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REAL_POETICAL
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This piece is the epitome of inspiration and faith....emotionally driven from sickness and love pains...still you stand and do what you blessed to do...and thats deliver pure poetry...each line i felt the pain and struggle of illness and lack of love...the details were so in depth that i felt the dilemma of those symptoms....bottom line this could be your best work...thank you
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Black Roses,
thanks for reading this jawn, I apprecaite the feedback, and I'm glad it made you feel something because I poured my heart out into this joint.
Hey Chozenwun,
I appreciate the feedback, and yes this was like one of my personal pieces and I wanted ya'll to have a glimpse of it.. Glad you could digg the strengthness in this drop. Indeed creating this piece gives me a sense of peace as well, and to express this pain I've been going thru for so long feels great to get off my chest. This experince def made me stronger and I'm glad you saw that in this poem.
Aye Real P,
you already know, thanks for the props. I have to admitt this is one my greatest piece i've ever wrote.. and a long one at that. Usually my material is short simple without going in on my emotions but I had to go all in on this jawn. Overall, I'm glad I delivered a great poetic peice and made ya'll feel something because that's what it suppose to do.. Get ya'll to feel it and you guys have'd so that's well accomplish. And thank you for reading as well. Being sick and going thru a failed relationship with my ex was defintely hard, it felt like no one wanted me because I was sick.. shit was hard..then having to open up again was even harder because it went back to opening a lot of old wounds again that I'm still trying to recover from that and for it not to turn to something was painful, but o well, that's life. Perhaps a learned lesson.
Peace ya'll. thanks for the feedback..
thanks for reading this jawn, I apprecaite the feedback, and I'm glad it made you feel something because I poured my heart out into this joint.
Hey Chozenwun,
I appreciate the feedback, and yes this was like one of my personal pieces and I wanted ya'll to have a glimpse of it.. Glad you could digg the strengthness in this drop. Indeed creating this piece gives me a sense of peace as well, and to express this pain I've been going thru for so long feels great to get off my chest. This experince def made me stronger and I'm glad you saw that in this poem.
Aye Real P,
you already know, thanks for the props. I have to admitt this is one my greatest piece i've ever wrote.. and a long one at that. Usually my material is short simple without going in on my emotions but I had to go all in on this jawn. Overall, I'm glad I delivered a great poetic peice and made ya'll feel something because that's what it suppose to do.. Get ya'll to feel it and you guys have'd so that's well accomplish. And thank you for reading as well. Being sick and going thru a failed relationship with my ex was defintely hard, it felt like no one wanted me because I was sick.. shit was hard..then having to open up again was even harder because it went back to opening a lot of old wounds again that I'm still trying to recover from that and for it not to turn to something was painful, but o well, that's life. Perhaps a learned lesson.
Peace ya'll. thanks for the feedback..
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jayy.prime
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wow..i had a knot in my throat as this piece went along..you showed us your rock bottom, then the climb back up...this may be your best piece, if not one of the best pieces i've read...i love how through every step, you took us there..fear, discovery, heartache, then being at peace...a beautiful, beautiful piece..thanks for sharing with us *hugs*
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It's Mook!
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That was one of the few poems I ever read that took me through such a wide range of emotions. To go through so much and to keep fighting shows the true testement of a person and the will to continue in this world. You have been blessed with the gift of words but more importantly the gift of existance, and readin that makes me realize how much I take it for granted. Thank you for writing this.
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jayy.prime;643792 said:
aww thank you for the hugs jay! Preciate that..
Most of all thanks for reading my drop, indeed I had to take my readers from the beginning to hopefully the end of my battle with my illness. Its def one of my greatest pieces I've written.. As soon as it was completed, I was like I have to share this..I wrote bunch of other great personal pieces but i feel those are classified.. Just on some dark shit that i try and not open up that part of the chapter again.. Newayz over all thanks for the props!
Peace!
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It's Mook!;644320 said:
Yo mook,
I appreciate the time taking to read this long ass emotional poetry
so thank u for reading. This experince really just shows how much I can overcome and still be here and be like "its gon be okay" I mean I can't lie, I have many breakdowns but at the end of the day what counts is that I'm still here and I'm still able to watch my kids grow.. And I hope to read some more great material from you as well so keep writing!Peace!
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TheHarlemCrusader
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Powerful indeed! I know some who suffer from this as well. Stay strong, Homie. Nice work!
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tupacfan;762073 said:
no doubt mama-every bad thing in your life usually brings a good attitude after time
jus take it and use it-keep writing cuz someone else might be goin through the same thing or know someone who is and your words might help them get through it---you never know
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blackphysics
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Im glad to after all you went through, victory was still in your clutches. Never knew you went through all that, but glad to see you made it.
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