Ayo somebody battle me...

[love yal]

i been watchin your verses and you definitely got better

but some verses you rhyme better than others

i think you got to just work on being clearer so others can understand what you're saying

you still sound like a foreigner

you need more practice with your english sentence structure and grammar

your a hardworker ,keep it up and study more

i suggest you focus on the verses you have already posted and tryin to improve them over and over till you hit the ceiling

Thanks, I'ma keep working on my english, hopely I can sound better than a twelve grader..lol

My main focus like you said sound more clear, more sense, and better grammer...thanks again I'm keep working my verse

Rhymes and punchlines are my favorite...how about you?

 

[thedesolateone]

Thanks, I'ma keep working on my english, hopely I can sound better than a twelve grader..lol
My main focus like you said sound more clear, more sense, and better grammer...thanks again I'm keep working my verse
Rhymes and punchlines are my favorite...how about you?

im workin on my rhyme schemes,internal rhymes and four and five syllable rhymes
and studyin url and grindtime battles on youtube and also famous rap battles like remy ma and lady luck
i am working hard to develop lines that are multi-syllabic and punchlines simultaneously without sounding forced or predictable
also i am studying rappers weaknesses

 

[Triggy]

Damn left this shit slide for a minute, seen too many gimmicks,

bunch of popeyes without the spinach, damn the kings back in this, time for sparks to fly

i carved these guys, now he on some butterfly shit / soft like big titties bout to run a train on this broad,

im kosher like a synague song, war to the day you gone, my robes fine italion silks and gold

my mode, grip from snow bitches give up the kitty, i pimp on road, flip the script and hold, 38 calico blow the city

my money fithy, move weight through states like a gypsy, plus im too pretty

these niggas is jokes, your bicycle sick only thing you peddled thats dope, you man hoe

i got a tangerine colored lambo, a light tanned viper like randall

to cold to know, to hot to let go, im the champ, MK47 when i stamp, i got rank

wall street stocks, to get bank !

 

[thedesolateone]

you soft your skin is pastry
you said it your self that you blow the city
give everyone dome
get back in the closet with you gay fashion sense
italian silks and fools gold
you imagine dream cars you'll never own
get your bars up cant fuck with my poems
you throw like a girl fags shouldnt hurl stones
just gonna get you bashed and left with broke bones
wall street stocks ha! so ambitious now you dow jones
i wouldn't envy you even if you rhymes werent so obviously fictitious

 

[Triggy]

you soft your skin is pastry

you said it your self that you blow the city

give everyone dome

get back in the closet with you gay fashion sense

italian silks and fools gold

you imagine dream cars you'll never own

get your bars up cant fuck with my poems

you throw like a girl fags shouldnt hurl stones

just gonna get you bashed and left with broke bones

wall street stocks ha! so ambitious now you dow jones

i wouldn't envy you even if you rhymes werent so obviously fictitious

thats ill, im out for now but imma be back to bash you mr.butterfly !

 

[b.c.o.dcru]

i see you evaded my question/s ? you sound closeted.i am willin to bet you have gay porn on your hard drive.here are some more questions you probably wont answer:how old are you?at what age did you discover you was gay if in fact you are gay?why do you say i am lonely.did you read your comments?and your sayin i am lonely.i hope thats was not a come on because i dont go that way sorry. nobody can comfort me like my rhymes.lol

what do you have against gays anyway?are you one of them self-hatin gays?are you religious?

first the discussion was if i am a male or female now its internet fag shit?wonder where your headed with this?

i am gonna stay tuned.

*plays pateintly waiting by 50 cent*

^allll that....internet gay shit. To tell the thruth you talk like a female. If you know the meaning of the name u chose u would get the lonely comment, and to end it off ur just dumb. The question was are YOU and male or female? I just made the assumption ur a female based off ur reply to the question.

Now u wanna make me the target of questioning....neat trick but, ur just dumb off that do you tho. If u wanna battle we can do that cause going back and forth is for...you get what I'm sayin.

 

[thedesolateone]

^allll that....internet gay shit. To tell the thruth you talk like a female. If you know the meaning of the name u chose u would get the lonely comment, and to end it off ur just dumb. The question was are YOU and male or female? I just made the assumption ur a female based off ur reply to the question.
Now u wanna make me the target of questioning....neat trick but, ur just dumb off that do you tho. If u wanna battle we can do that cause going back and forth is for...you get what I'm sayin.

set up the thread and rules

 

[Triggy]

one two, we aint on what the desolate ones do,

we come through with noise, we aint scared of dem boys

let the sirens ring, we cover e'thing wit the scuba divers find the corpse when we win

game finito, bout that papaya extract from puerto rico, the game thang, you don chi chi man butterfly screens

we let the 9 milli metre, torch kings / even if you aint man enough to claim it

i'll say it, 2 glock gats to laminate it

my aim is, I.C champ battle record famous, couldnt even switch to some cartoon chat

but i'd rather your face on that milk carton fast, you carlton banks, im big willie style got fresh prince stacks

so put that shit on mute bruh, i distribute them keys like computers / the hard nigga from favella villas

go back to being a caterpillar, the team serve herses on 4 wheelers

im more realer !

 

[thedesolateone]

if your aim is ic battle record famous
your gonna need more training
your behind like caveman
those punches you wailin
have you surrounded by ominous ravens
the aura of daemons
leave you shook like an 8.7
or three jasons
cause you a little fruity like craisins
my flow alone leave you lost in the caymans
i put that work in
i punch that mic around
while you tryna get fresh at niketown
i set hours aside
i put that pen game down
while you make drug deals on the other side of town
your bars aint mature yet
they underages
pretendin you money makin
when you sit around makin funny faces

 

[Tupacfan]

thedesolateone is killing em' lol.

 

[Triggy]

if your aim is ic battle record famous

your gonna need more training

your behind like caveman

those punches you wailin

have you surrounded by ominous ravens

the aura of daemons

leave you shook like an 8.7

or three jasons

cause you a little fruity like craisins

my flow alone leave you lost in the caymans

i put that work in

i punch that mic around

while you tryna get fresh at niketown

i set hours aside

i put that pen game down

while you make drug deals on the other side of town

your bars aint mature yet

they underages

pretendin you money makin

when you sit around makin funny faces

he got a choir with him think his bars is hot,

when i had 2 million petition for my grammy spot,

best new artist, wit the most ruthless cartiledges, next year shit parked in garages

you garbage bitch, put your mouth on mute / i distribute powder tin foil

when it comes to rhymes my pen strike oil, coke pan boil, niggas is soft like big breast

im losing intrest, go huddle up or get benched, this is big boy game we serve wet

tech shoots, for big chains big whips like kunta in roots

to tell you the truth, got one eye in booth, another on mami wit the ankles in the roof

BM ribena colored coupes, bout to ball holding 1 4 like henry did for arsenal

but this is not soccer, just pre-warning for the chopper, come dumping

lumber jack a family tree, no freebies pure currencys, pure cocaine

they called ya boy david blaine, how i was boxed up displayed for days

going insane, spazz on the track / A-rod of the squad, bringing new york back

so nigga fall back, or nigga fall flat / i got globe, emeralds on my throne, fine mussolini robes

2 stallions in the garden, got enough base to sell out stadium gates

its not me you wanna face, oh boy, kaster troy face off no travalota

just your fam and black coats, teary eyed by the altar

word to my papa, the bible author ........... god's favourite son

move the numb on helicopters, penthouse copper, manhatton door knocker

check like barcode signs, every orphan call me papi

flow like i hit the lotto twice, me n you no need for sight

u can not impress me, using 2 calculator's to add up my next fee's

while im on that cola, you struggle for the pepsi

florida on jet ski's ....................... THE BEST !!!!!!!!!

 

[RiGGA]

yo im lovin how you cats are battling back and forth in my "got beef" thread but you champs think you could take time out to vote in LE? There's plenty of battles that need them, c'mon..

Oh and tupacfan you look like a mature lady with a good head on her shoulders...come break this young thang off haha I just broke 20 baby!

 

[thedesolateone]

gun brandishing this not a west side story
you start to worry as it gets even more gory
when i roll up my sleeves like maury
and pistol whip you till your nosebleeds
before anyone has time to police
i will be a cold breeze
run with a gang of four theives
that with steal you and leave you in the morgue with ease
for reasons unknown
i hold the throne and throw suns like stones
mariquana and mushrooms ive grown
to make your head feel like a ballon
while you in the salon i carry like a saloon
sone as it goes boom! you crashland on the moon
one of the fastest pewnms you never seen in a film
pity on triggy he get stuck like sticky green
bought on the block wrapped in cellophane
with hell to gain as always well arranged
you want hella fame instead your girlfriend gets revenge
banging her like gunshots in her kumquat
and other thangs you wouldnt wanna watch
and this is right after i leave you like my liquor:
on the rocks
you washed up anyway
flush out your colon when the semi spray
on a nice sunny day

 

[Poster#19]

I'll battle you implodez. Its my first time battling on here so you set up the rules. Fuck all that shit these dudes talkin.

 

[RiGGA]

nah i quit battling on this biased ass website. Niggas vote for they homies and always against you if they disagree on something you post...My advice is you find another website to battle on, cuz these niggas wack