I'm dope. peep my tracks

[pensive]

Holy Are You
[video=youtube;QHnotmag6Wc]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QHnotmag6Wc[/video]

pensive, focus and chiron the beast - assimilation
[video=youtube;IPi3_KKzytw]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IPi3_KKzytw[/video]

Don't Feed Them!!
[video=youtube;QjsbbvEjabI]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QjsbbvEjabI[/video]

no name
[video=youtube;lXgDdI18Sfk]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lXgDdI18Sfk[/video]

Its like that
[video=youtube;_7sS8FMdVSI]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_7sS8FMdVSI[/video]

100 bars pt 1
[video=youtube;6qakuHaOlPM]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6qakuHaOlPM[/video]

drop the world
[video=youtube;FoIkIoCFkas]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FoIkIoCFkas[/video]

 

[just.might.b.ok]

nigga start beggin for bread on your myspace bulletin

 

[pensive]

hahahahaha

I don't have a myspace.

however, I might make that my first bulletin.

thanks for the criticism albeit harsh

 

[CJ]

fuck yo lank nigga!

 

[Yung_Souf_Money]

it's aight

 

[pensive]

it's aight

thanks!

People on youtube are telling me to stop screaming....

anything else you would suggest?

or anyone for that matter?

 

[da champ]

I got a lot of suggestions actually. I just listened to the 100 Bars joint.

One, you definitely need to smooth out your flow. I understand your delivery is aggressive, but you cutting off the end of some of the words at the end of your bars to abruptly and before the beat. It makes it sound like you're off beat.

Two, your voice double are WAY too loud. It's overpowering your actual voice and it comes our kind of jarring.

Three, it's a hard thing to do, but you got to find a way to show you love hip-hop (since clearly you do) without coming off overly preachy.

Of all these things, I'd definitely say your flow needs to most work. It comes off as kind of choppy.

All that being said, you got some lyrics and occasionally you can string some rhymes together within a line which isn't an easy things to do. Keep working at it. You'll be aight. Just make sure you not putting together rhymes strictly because they happen to rhyme.

 

[pensive]

I got a lot of suggestions actually. I just listened to the 100 Bars joint.

One, you definitely need to smooth out your flow. I understand your delivery is aggressive, but you cutting off the end of some of the words at the end of your bars to abruptly and before the beat. It makes it sound like you're off beat.

Two, your voice double are WAY too loud. It's overpowering your actual voice and it comes our kind of jarring.

Three, it's a hard thing to do, but you got to find a way to show you love hip-hop (since clearly you do) without coming off overly preachy.

Of all these things, I'd definitely say your flow needs to most work. It comes off as kind of choppy.

All that being said, you got some lyrics and occasionally you can string some rhymes together within a line which isn't an easy things to do. Keep working at it. You'll be aight. Just make sure you not putting together rhymes strictly because they happen to rhyme.

Thanks!!!! thank you for real....

I will take it all to heart and make better music.

I always thought the doubles were a little over the top.

there's no reason for me to sound choppy, even if it is aggressive. will work on flow.

thanks again.