There is SO MUCH you could have done with this particular concept but I think you covered the basics. Man you coulda took this and ran with it in so many ways. I think you did a really good job, and I'm glad your friend likes it, but maybe you could try to personify the mental illness and chronicle the way it festers and sickens inside the mind of your friend. You've got a lot of directions you can go with this if you ever decide to revise it and I look forward to seeing some of your other work. Keep up the good work though man.
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