4 1/2 minute regret

[Tupacfan]

Im gonna have to take some time and re-read this..

but this post is just letting u know I ain't sleeping on your jawns lol...

 

[VSOP]

Im gonna have to take some time and re-read this..

but this post is just letting u know I ain't sleeping on your jawns lol...

lol no worries

I didn't think this piece would be so damn long myself-I went to reread and I caught myself sayin "damn thats long...." ................then contemplated readin it or not lol

 

[RuffDraft]

DAMMN! VSOP this piece is no joke fam, I loved it!!!

I can relate to it, I too am adopted, although my birth mother is still my mom (I just switched dads).

Props on this piece, you really flipped it and the last three lines are really nice way to set it off too… but my favourite part of this poem in particular is that the flow is so effortless and unforced as much as the verses are laid out with headings etc… just a great piece all round, superb! Congrats on this piece one of my favourites of yours :tu

 

[VSOP]

DAMMN! VSOP this piece is no joke fam, I loved it!!!

I can relate to it, I too am adopted, although my birth mother is still my mom (I just switched dads).

Props on this piece, you really flipped it and the last three lines are really nice way to set it off too… but my favourite part of this poem in particular is that the flow is so effortless and unforced as much as the verses are laid out with headings etc… just a great piece all round, superb! Congrats on this piece one of my favourites of yours :tu

thanks for the feedback RD-definitely a touchy subject for most my life

its crazy how people still get so amazed when I tell them I'm adopted like its a rarity or somethin.....

but again good looks for takin time to read, I know its easier said than done lately in WTE-I need to step up my reply game myself

bless

 

[RuffDraft]

thanks for the feedback RD-definitely a touchy subject for most my life

its crazy how people still get so amazed when I tell them I'm adopted like its a rarity or somethin.....

but again good looks for takin time to read, I know its easier said than done lately in WTE-I need to step up my reply game myself

bless

Yeah, it's dope that you can recognise something that affects you and direct it in a positive fashion towards poetry yet channeling the pain out of your system at the same time.

To be honest, I feel that you should let the birth dad go… only so long someone should matter, no matter their influence or significance… even close family. I know it's easier said than done though.

Keep droppin' 'em!

 

[VSOP]

there are people who would kill to write like that

nice piece

thanks for takin the time to read and reply

much appreciated fam

bless

 

[VSOP]

Yeah, it's dope that you can recognise something that affects you and direct it in a positive fashion towards poetry yet channeling the pain out of your system at the same time.

To be honest, I feel that you should let the birth dad go… only so long someone should matter, no matter their influence or significance… even close family. I know it's easier said than done though.

Keep droppin' 'em!

its not even much of an afterthought on my mind, adoption isn't a thought that comes up daily ya feel me? I was just talkin to someone about it and the story that I know, came home and jus ran with it while still fresh on the brain

thanks for takin time to read though my dude

 

[REAL_POETICAL]

wowwwwww....this piece open some wounds that I've yet healed...you literally spoke to those that endured the abandoned with flare and ammunition...each line was raw and open from the heart...you poured your soul into this poem and the results was jawdropping...thats the reason why as much as I "retire" and wanna quit being a writer/poet....I come crawling back to put in work and see work from those that take the art seriously

a family tree with no branches and no roots

father......I am the old you with a winner smile

I owe you

heres a middle finger from my inner child.....

almost choke up with that line...especially from the perspective of a single mother child with a dude that posed as a "stepdad"...but enough of that....bottom line you still is one of the best poets to ever typed in this fucking sub forum...keep dropping those lines of pure truth called poetry my fellow poet

peace

sums up

 

[RuffDraft]

its not even much of an afterthought on my mind, adoption isn't a thought that comes up daily ya feel me? I was just talkin to someone about it and the story that I know, came home and jus ran with it while still fresh on the brain

thanks for takin time to read though my dude

Yeah, I understand :tu

No problem, keep 'em coming!

 

[VSOP]

wowwwwww....this piece open some wounds that I've yet healed...you literally spoke to those that endured the abandoned with flare and ammunition...each line was raw and open from the heart...you poured your soul into this poem and the results was jawdropping...thats the reason why as much as I "retire" and wanna quit being a writer/poet....I come crawling back to put in work and see work from those that take the art seriously

a family tree with no branches and no roots

father......I am the old you with a winner smile

I owe you

heres a middle finger from my inner child.....

almost choke up with that line...especially from the perspective of a single mother child with a dude that posed as a "stepdad"...but enough of that....bottom line you still is one of the best poets to ever typed in this fucking sub forum...keep dropping those lines of pure truth called poetry my fellow poet

peace

sums up

my dude I always preciate ya feedback

I think 75% of the nation has this feeling in they memory that can't be touched ya feel me?

its one of those unspeakable topics that I never talk about but writing to strangers lets me vent lol as sad as that seems---sometimes needed

bless

 

[Tupacfan]

BRAVO!

one of THEE best pieces i've read around here lately!

this was ill VSOP, like it's sad too. but you definitly brought the emotions out.. Glad to see you around here often too